Example of analysis of an issue essay: score 2
Last updated: 13 Dec 2006
"Money is the root of all evil"
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion above. Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.
I strongly agree with the statement 'Money is the root of all evil'. Well, it doesn't mean that money is not at all needed. It's required in every walks of life, for food , for shelter, for clothes, for medication and etc..
But I strongly feel having money more than required in ones life leads to unhappyness and leading to unnessary complications and troubles in life. To my experience I knew a friend, who has money than needed and who always counts everything in terms of life. For him money is everything. Though he has every comfort with him, I never seen him relaxed. In the course of making more money, he lost everything, making him restless and unhappiness. From my observation I believe money is needed but it should not be a more than required.
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This essay receives a 2.
There is so little written here, that one finds it difficult to even evaluate the structure or the ideas. Additionally, there are multiple spelling and grammar errors that interfere with meaning.
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